[Green] Proposed revised brochure for match fund - if we want to have a brochure

[Cindy Taylor]

Thanks Adeline for reworking the brochure to make it applicable to the
current situation. I have one small observation to consider.

It's great to have an image of FUUSM's Religious Education/Office building-
and important to include that since it since it is part of the whole
project of reducing FUUSM's carbon footprint and the revisions in the solar
matching fund.

As I read through the brochure the title of this building is "RE/Office
building" . I noticed that the word "building" is also capitalized at the
end of paragraph titled Why Did FUUSM go Solar? Do you want that?  It's the
only place that "building" appears to be capitalized.

in the section "We've been challenged"  the "RE" is explained with the
 more complete description, "Religious Education/Office building"
I think this helps other folks not familiar with FUUSM to have this more
complete title... so I'm glad you included that more complete description
there.

For clarity you might want to use the same more complete name for the
building in the caption you have with the picture, if you have the space...
and perhaps edit it to read: Like many Marietta houses, FUUSM's Religious
Education/Office building is an old structure........

Currently is is listed in the caption as "FUUSM Office"

I realize the photo was taken when the building was used as Mother
O'Riley's Books because that sign is clearly visible in the photo..  I
don't know if that will be confusing.. but perhaps that's the best photo
you have to use..  I'm wondering, when did FUUSM acquire the building? Was
it still a bookstore for part of that time?  I know know and am curious..
I do remember shopping at the bookstore!


You've done a great job of editing the previous brochure and its makes an
even greater message about reducing carbon footprint and energy efficiency.
Thanks,
Cindy Taylor



On Thu, Nov 30, 2017 at 9:10 PM, gbanz42--- via Green <green at fuusm.org>
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> Great job on the revised brochure, Adeline.  Thanks.
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> ---- Adeline Bailey via Green <green at fuusm.org> wrote:
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